Dust is in the sun-beams losing float
then wind-dancing.
Don’t shut the blinds, your skin is still
in the light slivers.
There’s a fear here,
of microscopes and telescopes
put to bare eyes not
finding much to make something.
Thoughts still grope for dreams
put into jars
named as stories
then shelved
where memories
lose themselves amongst labels.
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April 6, 2011 at 10:36 am
Teri C
I love the reality of this written with so much insight into human nature.
April 10, 2011 at 1:10 pm
BFG
Thank you Terry. Very kind to say so. Thanks for reading.
April 6, 2011 at 10:59 am
Ina
beautiful I like the misterious feel it has.
April 10, 2011 at 1:10 pm
BFG
Many thanks!
April 6, 2011 at 12:24 pm
Jingle
very cool imagery.
Glad to have you share with us.
🙂
April 10, 2011 at 1:11 pm
BFG
Thanks Jingle.
April 6, 2011 at 12:34 pm
Vinay
Stunning; stunning is this imagery. Memories lost amongst labeled jars of past stories.. I agree with Teri, this was written with lots of insight I think!
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April 10, 2011 at 1:12 pm
BFG
Many thanks for your comments, much appreciated. Thanks for reading.
April 6, 2011 at 1:36 pm
Paulami
i simply loved the last few lines.
April 10, 2011 at 1:12 pm
BFG
Thanks!
April 6, 2011 at 1:37 pm
KRM
Incredible depth of thought and insight and beautifully expressed.
April 10, 2011 at 1:12 pm
BFG
Very kind of you to say so. Thank you for reading and commenting.
April 6, 2011 at 1:38 pm
poetsandall
I love your writing and how you view life. Well done 🙂
April 10, 2011 at 1:13 pm
BFG
How nice. Thank you for saying so. Cheers!
April 6, 2011 at 2:56 pm
Jack Edwards
Really good poem. I love the last line, it feels perfectly balanced when spoken.
April 10, 2011 at 1:13 pm
BFG
Much appreciated. Thanks for reading.
April 6, 2011 at 2:57 pm
JL Dodge
this one swept me away !
Nice rally piece !
JL&B
April 10, 2011 at 1:14 pm
BFG
Very nice to know. Thanks!
April 6, 2011 at 2:58 pm
Linda
Your opening line reminded me of lying as a child in the sun streaming in the window and watching the dust swirl and slowly settle. Nice connection between that and the settling of dreams on shelves never to be attained.
April 10, 2011 at 1:14 pm
BFG
That sounds like a nice memory itself. Thanks for sharing and reading.
April 6, 2011 at 3:40 pm
athursdayschild has a long way to go and much to be thankful for.
Wonderfully written!
April 10, 2011 at 1:15 pm
BFG
Many thanks! Cheers.
April 6, 2011 at 4:08 pm
Tasha
Great imagery, loved the rhythm of the last 6 lines.
April 10, 2011 at 1:15 pm
BFG
Thanks for reading and commenting. Much appreciated.
April 6, 2011 at 10:30 pm
Amropali
It’s early morning and this post reminds me of my days in the school lab.
It felt like the younger me looking through the window(while the teacher blabs on) and thinking of all the things past and all the things yet to come.
April 10, 2011 at 1:16 pm
BFG
Very nice to know that this brought that memory back for you. Thanks for sharing and commenting.
April 6, 2011 at 10:53 pm
bendedspoon
put into jars — so true. Beuatiful write 🙂
April 10, 2011 at 1:16 pm
BFG
Cheers!
April 7, 2011 at 5:18 am
julie
There’s a fear here,
of microscopes and telescopes
put to bare eyes not
finding much to make something.
an very good way of describing the thought of being
April 10, 2011 at 1:18 pm
BFG
Thank you… a little too scared of being here, perhaps. But, I suppose that’s all part of it. Cheers!
April 7, 2011 at 8:49 am
fiveloaf
i concur with you.. nce write! my thursday~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/12/30/let-it-be-it/
April 7, 2011 at 9:14 am
robin the dreamer
a perfect way to describe morning… love your writing style
April 10, 2011 at 1:19 pm
BFG
Many thanks for saying so!
April 7, 2011 at 9:34 pm
Danielle Mari
Love the lyricism of the first stanza and then the surprising specificity of the second. Great images, very intriguing. I’ll be rereading it!
April 10, 2011 at 1:19 pm
BFG
Thank you very much for your pointed comment, much appreciated.
April 8, 2011 at 6:05 am
Alcina
I was transformed altogether into a different world..I was dreaming on and on with your words..Surprising..thoughtful and lovely..
Alcina
April 10, 2011 at 1:20 pm
BFG
A very lovely comment, thank you for saying so.
April 8, 2011 at 8:41 am
Jingle
please visit poets who were here for you.
Thanks.
Happy Rally.
April 8, 2011 at 3:31 pm
dunstancarter
Nice poem – enjoyed the subtle wafts of romance and gentle morning bliss
April 10, 2011 at 1:20 pm
BFG
Cheers and thanks!
April 9, 2011 at 4:38 pm
Gloria
Beautiful write….I especially liked the last few lines.
April 10, 2011 at 1:20 pm
BFG
Thanks Gloria!
April 10, 2011 at 1:40 am
Amity
Very nice imagery…there’s so much to think about though!
April 10, 2011 at 1:21 pm
BFG
Ha! Well…
Thanks for reading!
April 10, 2011 at 10:15 am
satanshotel
Excellent work…though it leaves me with a slight unease thinking about the future! 😛
April 10, 2011 at 1:21 pm
BFG
Apologies for that! Thanks for reading.
April 11, 2011 at 8:29 am
D2
Everything gets lost in the pages of time. Lovely poem.
April 11, 2011 at 4:30 pm
Dream Trekker
very lovely poem.
April 12, 2011 at 2:26 am
Meghna
wonderful and meaningful and real lines…thanks for sharing!!!
April 12, 2011 at 4:59 am
Dheepikaa
Beautiful visual of the dust in sun beam. I really like how the fear of microscopes and telescopes though from a different line finds its relation with that image.
April 13, 2011 at 5:28 am
-D
i super love this! 🙂 loved the rest before the last line, I don’t know but it kinda felt dramatic for me.
April 13, 2011 at 1:52 pm
April Denton
Glad I found your work, very nice.